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r18208 | kalab | 2007-03-26 05:27:18 -0700 (Mon, 26 Mar 2007) | 1 line
No other thought ii is needed before Dick puts head into tap. Less is more.
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r18132 | kalab | 2007-03-23 17:49:21 -0700 (Fri, 23 Mar 2007) | 1 line
More is less. I need no more for the chapter. The use of Entropy is pointless and should be done no more and it will be removed from the book. Lesss is more with the key words. United States of America is better for it focuses upon us all.
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r17207 | kalab | 2007-02-09 22:45:56 -0800 (Fri, 09 Feb 2007) | 1 line
There is no button to push, so the button sentence was removed. I have changed Entropy to Extropy for I found the term Extropy earlier this week (see the FunWork123 or FunWork122 logs) and have since been thinking of it. I like Extropy better than Entropy for Extropy as it is define. I do not know if this is correct for as I have read the definition of Extropy I am not sure if the book The Detective Store is about order or about the chaos of life. For now it will remain though it is liable to change back to Entropy which to me represent more of a chaotic state. I have been thinking about not using either term and just calling it the system tap or something else. I will edit the chapters and while editing of cousre keep this in mind.
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r14431 | kalab | 2006-10-27 21:50:14 -0700 (Fri, 27 Oct 2006) | 1 line
These words were thought as I thought of music and wanting to listen to music and thought of how when I first began writing The Detective Store music inspired me to write something about fool proof plan spoke from a track of MF Doom of a cartoon I assume was the Fantastic Four. This thought then thought of the need to include the sentence of sentences written from those words when I really thought about the words fool proof. I do believe we Amercians are fools.
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r13990 | kalab | 2006-10-10 21:35:21 -0700 (Tue, 10 Oct 2006) | 1 line
The end. The grammar edit. The removal of and is because the comma places the pace of the scene. The end, for now, read to be the end I want for the story, but does seem a bit empty without every other words before it.
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r13804 | kalab | 2006-10-02 18:14:24 -0700 (Mon, 02 Oct 2006) | 1 line
The green button doens't need an to define what it is needed to do. There should be something in the previous chapter that identifies the green button and the fact the it is glowing and glowing is on.
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r13767 | kalab | 2006-10-01 14:38:23 -0700 (Sun, 01 Oct 2006) | 1 line
Edit to rename the change tags and rad the end. The removal of the note of wanting so many blank pages is removed and will just be the remainder of the page of the chapter page. The words still to read the reader to write the end after the end because Dick has entered an A.I. Detective into the system. Maybe...
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r13173 | kalab | 2006-09-10 15:47:33 -0700 (Sun, 10 Sep 2006) | 1 line
The edit of chapter name from Hex to Binary. Binary is the state of the World.
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r11776 | kalab | 2006-08-02 05:14:38 -0700 (Wed, 02 Aug 2006) | 1 line
Read and write for the only words of the chapter. I thought to maybe have a sentence at the end of F blank pages, but before finger began to type on keyboard because the first an only paragraph is the beginning and the end.
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r11206 | kalab | 2006-07-11 05:57:51 -0700 (Tue, 11 Jul 2006) | 1 line
MOre thoughts of the end. One read since last write. The words belong. Funny that I had wrote United States of Eden and not United States of America.
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r11187 | kalab | 2006-07-10 17:41:16 -0700 (Mon, 10 Jul 2006) | 1 line
The words to begin the chapter to conform to the way the chapter's are structured. The words, I feel, will also give more understanding and meaning if there are words beginning and then some (say one sixteenth the size) of space unthe cover.
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r11056 | kalab | 2006-07-07 21:34:28 -0700 (Fri, 07 Jul 2006) | 1 line
The files of the chapters of the detective store forked from mail file and edited to contain only the words for the chapter so more words maybe written and honed and focused (read, written, editted, published) to complete the story and create a book.
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r11055 | kalab | 2006-07-07 21:15:07 -0700 (Fri, 07 Jul 2006) | 1 line
The Chapter F of The Detective Store. The end of the book, the story. The completion and the release into thought of the book of the reader...of you.
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r11037 | kalab | 2006-07-07 18:20:09 -0700 (Fri, 07 Jul 2006) | 1 line
More thoughts of framing the frame from thoughts of the day. I also decided it should be may and that I need to branch the file now.
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r11030 | kalab | 2006-07-07 06:12:12 -0700 (Fri, 07 Jul 2006) | 1 line
Read and edit. Edit and read. Read and edit. The thought and the comprehension of the first words reading like words of a book. The files need to be split and moved to Words. If my head was not so distant and numb with alcohol, I would have have branched this file today. There is tomorrow.
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r10968 | kalab | 2006-07-02 20:54:59 -0700 (Sun, 02 Jul 2006) | 1 line
Thoughs had about an hour ago while walking up an incline. I noticed when I focused on the horizon the back ground sort of bouced as did the foreground. There is of course the metaphoric qualities of the sentence. The sentence was written last after reading and wrijting read for the location to write the sentnece. I need to branch the file, or fork the file, Maybe I will do that tomorrow. It is gettin gbig and difficult to manage, and find a focus.
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r10920 | kalab | 2006-06-30 05:45:36 -0700 (Fri, 30 Jun 2006) | 1 line
The question of Government wanting to have Dick put head in the Entropy Bowl is something I have written about and thought about and given some ofthe purposes of the writing, to learn, express and provoke, liberty to add in ideas and questions in the story form. I thought after writing the words at the end of the story and thought about how to write the turning back on of Psycho after Psycho has been fueled. More thoughts here and there but reading and writing began at the top fo the page, then I had an idea for for thoughtlog or seelog (not dialog) at the end of the story to reason why Dick resons to stick head in bowl.
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r10907 | kalab | 2006-06-29 20:52:38 -0700 (Thu, 29 Jun 2006) | 1 line
Reading, writing and editing. The words are actually writing where they need to be written. The addition of why The Story begins were it does is because Dick says United States of America and that is one of the keywords used to begin the reading and recording of Dick's mind Of course, because the Government is reading and recording it does not mean they are listening.
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r10899 | kalab | 2006-06-28 23:00:35 -0700 (Wed, 28 Jun 2006) | 1 line
The thoughts still need to be more smoooth in the flow I read prior, chapter 3. The actions to test the make of A.I. is what will be. Fun thoughts. The thought after 2 need to be refined, as do the rest of the thoughts.
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r10889 | kalab | 2006-06-28 18:20:45 -0700 (Wed, 28 Jun 2006) | 1 line
Thoughts of how to make Dick more of a motive of how and why he hides the thought. Does he just hide it because he can\? Just a thought I have been having about the motive of Dick wanting to access...Or maybe not so much the motive put how to hide the desire. Does he purposuly slipt and think at times of his own desires to access the information and doesn't care if the government is reading his mind and is also figuring that the thoughts alone will or may trigger an alarm for the Government to arrest him. So the thoughts need to be some how written of Dick seeing that he wants the data to see the data and to warn the Government of his plans and alert the Government by hoping the thought filter will see his desires to help a G5.
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r10879 | kalab | 2006-06-28 06:01:52 -0700 (Wed, 28 Jun 2006) | 1 line
More reading and editing and words and story. More refine ment. The thought read to be better. Time will define if it is. New thoughts and inventions for books a complete.
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r10854 | kalab | 2006-06-27 17:42:23 -0700 (Tue, 27 Jun 2006) | 1 line
More wwords and reading and editing. The thought of how I wrote Psycho to read Dick's mind will be used until Psycho can read and write to Dick's mind.
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r10851 | kalab | 2006-06-27 06:32:18 -0700 (Tue, 27 Jun 2006) | 1 line
I do beleive I have almost written chapter ones flow and thought process and trail of thought. Reading and editing and writing. The thought flow of dick almost a flow. Time is near to separate into Words and write a book. The Strobe weapon was something that I just though of. This after editing syber scan. The edits beyond 1 are what I did last as when spending a few minutes reading around. I read I need to get rid of I's.
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r10832 | kalab | 2006-06-26 06:06:48 -0700 (Mon, 26 Jun 2006) | 2 lines
Words read of the first of the files for the files ls long and won't be split (maybe) anytime soon. The first of the chapter was read and some editing and writing done. I am still writing for the flow of the narrative and the story. The thought almost the flow and style for Dick. Psycho and the voiced of inidividuals more delveloped, I believe, but could be read as bad if the first doens't define the narrative in a way to entertain and maintain reading.
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r10816 | kalab | 2006-06-25 10:14:39 -0700 (Sun, 25 Jun 2006) | 2 lines
Reading. I Am lost in what I need to write for Dick to come to the understanding and reason for doing anything. The malfunction reason I thinnk I have written, but it is lost in a lot of repitious dialog that may be needed, but if used should better framed and more natural even for two being trained to control their actions and thought. The file needs to be split so I can begin to define words as chapters and with chapters further focus on the words to define the book.
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r10811 | kalab | 2006-06-24 20:38:26 -0700 (Sat, 24 Jun 2006) | 2 lines
MOre reading than editing or writing. Mind is somewhere.
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r10781 | kalab | 2006-06-24 11:30:59 -0700 (Sat, 24 Jun 2006) | 2 lines
Mustange and Dick depart. Mustang will be captured by the U.S. Government and thrown in confinement when Mustang leaves Larry's Fajitas and goes to the Government for help. Need some more thought, more discription of hte house for the characters.
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r10778 | kalab | 2006-06-24 10:27:08 -0700 (Sat, 24 Jun 2006) | 2 lines
More of the departure of Mustang for the apartment. And some removal of excessive Dick sucking.
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r10775 | kalab | 2006-06-24 08:18:42 -0700 (Sat, 24 Jun 2006) | 2 lines
Words of Mustang getting on the job.
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r10774 | kalab | 2006-06-24 08:01:51 -0700 (Sat, 24 Jun 2006) | 2 lines
Thought of finishing the reason for Psycho's transformation had inspired thought. The words written more to create reason and a reasonable story of how and why Psycho is before Dick.
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r10754 | kalab | 2006-06-23 18:15:04 -0700 (Fri, 23 Jun 2006) | 2 lines
The thought of the day thrust to page. A expulsion of agression through words. The story of how and why needs is on its way and is almost there. Need create a logic reason and alos a reason to caste the ignorance where it should be caste. Need more description, more sound, more taste, more sight, more touch. Where are they at. NEXT TO A CLUB. Things more about the tought and aremember to build upon them and bring them back up and go off on tangents and think of odd things one thinks of. Remember this si a A.I. Detective thought though, so he has control over his mind.
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r10743 | kalab | 2006-06-23 05:53:08 -0700 (Fri, 23 Jun 2006) | 2 lines
I wanted to read, edit and write the reason of how Psycho thinks he found life, but I could not find the passage for there are too many words to read to find the words. I instead read and wrote the third and departing chapter. More ideas for time and peronality and movement. The thoughts need to be more often and the thoughts written need to be edited so they are fragments like thoughts.
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r10727 | kalab | 2006-06-22 17:54:03 -0700 (Thu, 22 Jun 2006) | 2 lines
I read areound trying to find the part in Chapter 2 or 3 I was writing. I become lost a couple times and just read and edited what was read. Most the time, of course, was used to write the words for chapter one. Upon the writing of this log I realize I really need to branch and begin inidividual chapter files.
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r10715 | kalab | 2006-06-22 05:55:48 -0700 (Thu, 22 Jun 2006) | 2 lines
More reading and editing and writing of the last of chapter 2. The chapter needs more reading and writing, but is flowing ot chapter 3.
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r10714 | kalab | 2006-06-22 05:46:40 -0700 (Thu, 22 Jun 2006) | 2 lines
The words for the Third chapter are better than the words the replaced. The words connect the flow. The flow still needs to be read and edited. I may need more words and questions, but that can wait for the next chapter after Psycho reveals self.
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r10713 | kalab | 2006-06-22 05:29:17 -0700 (Thu, 22 Jun 2006) | 2 lines
These words where written yesterday and where timed but needed to be transposed to novel. Theses are terms the military are teaching the public. Any more of these terms heard will be written downn and used.
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r10698 | kalab | 2006-06-21 17:58:20 -0700 (Wed, 21 Jun 2006) | 2 lines
The words to and for the words for the definition and introduction of Neuro. What was written is what I like to read. The grammar fitting.
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r10697 | kalab | 2006-06-21 17:22:59 -0700 (Wed, 21 Jun 2006) | 2 lines
More reading and editing of the frist chapter and trying to find the follow for the grammar.
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r10679 | kalab | 2006-06-21 06:03:55 -0700 (Wed, 21 Jun 2006) | 2 lines
Read and edit of chapter one. After thinking of on the walks to and from work in short spans during long spans of random thought I choose to not time, I have thought about the use of the somantic and telepathic mark and realize I need to not use the mark as I had. I do now understand that the paragraphs are what is in the long term memory or a part of instinct or conditioning. Look at the crowd could be used as crowd description. Some conditioning is thought and that conditioning needs to be shown and to shown as something that though conditioned needs to be focused.
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r10664 | kalab | 2006-06-20 18:42:17 -0700 (Tue, 20 Jun 2006) | 2 lines
More reading and editing. I think this will be a week of reading and editing for the file is too big and I woul like to read and edit and think to see what exists and what doesn't. I like what I have read sofar. Lessing use of I is always good. If not good then better for Dick is not a selfish. I have had some thoughts about the end and how it maybe during the rebirth of Psycho, Psycho could become a G5 killing machine again, or Psycho could have been a killing machine all along and was ment to kill Dick because the G5 killing machines and perfect its killing ability so well it wanted to see if it could convince Dick to kill himself. Though this will never be defined, these possibilities need to be thought by Dick. Thought of Dick and the grammaredit will be easier once file is files..
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r10663 | kalab | 2006-06-20 18:11:42 -0700 (Tue, 20 Jun 2006) | 2 lines
The Detective Store Synopsis was read after I read chapters while in the Secure and Secrete building. ...The addition of the sentence was made after the synposis was read after the words of the Secrete and Secure Government building was read and writed and edited. The process all align. The synopsis I have found is a good way to find the right location for the good Hyper-Content of the day.
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r10612 | kalab | 2006-06-16 18:00:29 -0700 (Fri, 16 Jun 2006) | 2 lines
The detective store write was inspired by today and the past days of hearing some much news that I now have a place to focus. The store and shapping the reason he lies and doesn't want to leave with out Psycho needs to be defined with more detail as the words are written. I am thinking of changing the name of Benjamin Franklin. I know not what the name would be. A name more sympolic maybe\?
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r10598 | kalab | 2006-06-15 18:10:20 -0700 (Thu, 15 Jun 2006) | 2 lines
I found myself reading and editing the first chapter then began to read and edit the third which is where I want to edit. I read mostly, to remember and now i do I can almost see the grammar use of Word Prostitute Grammar.
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r10597 | kalab | 2006-06-15 17:39:07 -0700 (Thu, 15 Jun 2006) | 2 lines
I read the last half of the synopsis and the first of the book adn thought of how see for seeing for sight. There needs to be some more thought. I need read and write someother part of the book to find that thought.
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r10587 | kalab | 2006-06-15 06:02:00 -0700 (Thu, 15 Jun 2006) | 2 lines
The chapter edited will be the chapter I will read and edit for a bit. it is one that needs to be read and edited. The direction and action thought. More description needed. The story exists to write and I will and so I will.
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r10586 | kalab | 2006-06-15 05:45:29 -0700 (Thu, 15 Jun 2006) | 2 lines
I am trying to make an effort to write, but I shouldn't be writing the end. I want to write somewhere else for the end is something I need to think about more and how best to write to it.
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r10559 | kalab | 2006-06-14 06:01:13 -0700 (Wed, 14 Jun 2006) | 2 lines
I feel good writing near the end to fhe chapter before the non-human energy draining elevator shaft.
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r10558 | kalab | 2006-06-14 05:48:28 -0700 (Wed, 14 Jun 2006) | 2 lines
Of yesterdays thoughts, The addition of God to those that control D.C.. The continual integration of the feel and see and think. I am happy I don't need to mark everything and that feel is now defined. I need to write and read on to other chapters so I may forget and reread the first of book. Valerie hasn't said anything about The Detective Store exept with words in an email saying she received the file. I haven't asked if she is even reading it. She may. She may not.
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r10543 | kalab | 2006-06-13 17:23:57 -0700 (Tue, 13 Jun 2006) | 2 lines
Read around, mostly end. Reading for a place to write that is not the first two chapters. Maybe chapter three. I do need to split the files. The repository may be translated this weekend.
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r10542 | kalab | 2006-06-13 17:12:58 -0700 (Tue, 13 Jun 2006) | 2 lines
The frame of see and feel thought of during the walk to work while reading Lassivyous aloud the words feel as you feel and then stopped read Lassivyous and thought of The Detective Store and how to frame feel for feel should how to define what is now a non-marked paragraph, the narrative, what you feel. The feel is now frame for The Detective Store and for Word ProstituteTM GrammarTM.
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r10531 | kalab | 2006-06-13 05:54:03 -0700 (Tue, 13 Jun 2006) | 2 lines
Reading and thinking about the changes made last night to express everything with the somatic marks. I like the way it reads but where to d seperate. Do I separate when Psycho enters, another being in the area of the feeler. How does the mind read work\? When to use the mark\? Questions, questions, quesions, Need to think about this while walking or as a thought of the day for I need to know how to mark words.
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r10520 | kalab | 2006-06-12 20:19:20 -0700 (Mon, 12 Jun 2006) | 2 lines
I think I have found the way the words will be written for the A.I. Detective. The words of the first chapter have been marked with the grammar and the words to define to write the words the way the Detective store is to be written for it best define the form of the Detective Store. I wonder if Valerie has read The Detective Store yet and if not I may have her read this one...actually I may not. I don't know. This is the first time I have actually thought to think if Valerie has read any of it yet. I don't think she has for she has been wanting to finish the book she is reading now before...anyway, I 'll ask later to find if she has read the words yet and if not I may send her this revision so I can get her opinion on the grammar. Maybe...Maybe not. We shall see. I do like what is wrote and how it is wrote and find it should be written that way for it is i an A.I. Detective.
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r10509 | kalab | 2006-06-12 18:03:09 -0700 (Mon, 12 Jun 2006) | 2 lines
Further reading and edting and writing to make the thought trained but still like real thought and not some narrative of a book.
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r10501 | kalab | 2006-06-12 06:04:17 -0700 (Mon, 12 Jun 2006) | 2 lines
Thought of what needed to be written. Read here and there. Edititng the Grammar the words. Thinking of why Richard and Betty don't know (or reach) to the Government knowing Psycho nad Dick's exact loation. It think the go to the building to help protect it (and to fuck).
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r10480 | kalab | 2006-06-11 20:17:20 -0700 (Sun, 11 Jun 2006) | 2 lines
Some more thoughts. An effort to write The Detective Store for the third time today ends after only fifteen minutes. I need to write something other than the first, and that is something to begin in the morning. I will be able to write in the morning. Tonight I will tag the file of the revision after this commit and send the tagged revision to -v-. She wants to read it, just because she wants to read it so I will send it, but said to her that a smile or a frown is all she can reply with (for now for I could change my mind, but that will be noted when the change of mind (of action) occurs.
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r10470 | kalab | 2006-06-11 13:07:34 -0700 (Sun, 11 Jun 2006) | 2 lines
More reading and editing. The store of the reason G5 is not killing is and needs to be explained. To explain the actaul question/answers process will need to be defined throughout the store. I editing the words I think there is also the possible store line of wondering how a question is asked. Likely this will not.
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r10459 | kalab | 2006-06-11 08:57:10 -0700 (Sun, 11 Jun 2006) | 2 lines
The words and reading of chapter two needs to continue to be the focus for the words are of the story and reason thought before the many rewrites of the syno[isis. The story of how the question became to question and create Psycho will need to be as honed an sharp as how it is described in the synopsis. More thought may be needed too.
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r10458 | kalab | 2006-06-11 08:01:03 -0700 (Sun, 11 Jun 2006) | 2 lines
A first chapter that has been read and edited enough for now. The thought of Dick needs to be refined to resemble thought that is sort of random yet trained and orderly because the processes to create an A.I. Detective must be orderly.Lots of edits and reading with the commit. The words I suppose rady for another who just wants to read them and not edit them for I am not done editing the words of the first chapter. Nor am I complete with the writing.
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r10453 | kalab | 2006-06-10 19:47:11 -0700 (Sat, 10 Jun 2006) | 2 lines
REading and editing for Valerie wants to read and I want to give her at least the first chapter.
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r10433 | kalab | 2006-06-08 18:54:56 -0700 (Thu, 08 Jun 2006) | 2 lines
More of the store with the vision. I thought more of the why and thought of symbolism of having Dick naked and keeping Dick naked. I also thought more of the why which is something that I will, may, want to work on before the files become many, which I hope to be next week.
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r10425 | kalab | 2006-06-07 21:39:14 -0700 (Wed, 07 Jun 2006) | 2 lines
Words to ready for the fall.
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r10410 | kalab | 2006-06-07 05:57:46 -0700 (Wed, 07 Jun 2006) | 2 lines
Think the thought of free thought now that Dick thinks the Government and Psycho can not read his mind.
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r10409 | kalab | 2006-06-07 05:50:57 -0700 (Wed, 07 Jun 2006) | 2 lines
Trying to find the thought of Dick. The thought of Dick will be more for there is not a nother character or charcters or people for Dick to control his thoughts. Dick doesn't want to control his thoughtws anymore.
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r10394 | kalab | 2006-06-06 18:40:11 -0700 (Tue, 06 Jun 2006) | 2 lines
I have read and I have thought. More timing and more steps for the words to become.
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r10377 | kalab | 2006-06-06 05:48:40 -0700 (Tue, 06 Jun 2006) | 2 lines
Read the last chapters. Skipped around. Edited.
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r10366 | kalab | 2006-06-05 18:33:10 -0700 (Mon, 05 Jun 2006) | 2 lines
A thought thoght on the way home. Writing Dick's thought process now that he is alone. is important.
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r10365 | kalab | 2006-06-05 18:25:43 -0700 (Mon, 05 Jun 2006) | 2 lines
The synopsis reads good. Some coreections but nothing too serious. I like the end of the synopsis. The end is the end that the end the synopsis needs to be.
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r10352 | kalab | 2006-06-05 05:55:56 -0700 (Mon, 05 Jun 2006) | 2 lines
The nano machines will be the nuclear fuel depot, so Dick needs to thow Psycho up, which he does, to fuel Psycho.
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r10351 | kalab | 2006-06-05 05:40:14 -0700 (Mon, 05 Jun 2006) | 2 lines
Write familar words. I scannned and read pieces of other chapters and read to the end knowinng that if I wanted to write anything more than two words this morning I would need to read the last chapter for it is in the mind more than the rest. The words are okay and lead to where the story needs to go. I need to know figure out where the nuclear depot is located. I was going to have nuclear depots along the section of walls, but I have begun to think have the nuclear depots in the wall is too easy. Writing the words won't take much thought, once the story and depot location is found.
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r10326 | kalab | 2006-06-04 15:27:50 -0700 (Sun, 04 Jun 2006) | 2 lines
More words. Some of them feel pulpy. The words are satisfying enogh for a beginning of the chapter. I now am ready for branching the file.
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r10325 | kalab | 2006-06-04 15:01:24 -0700 (Sun, 04 Jun 2006) | 2 lines
A read and edit. I can't foget the backpack.
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r10299 | kalab | 2006-06-04 06:26:02 -0700 (Sun, 04 Jun 2006) | 2 lines
I forgot, for a time, about the back pack and the Entropy Core of Psycho. More words removed for there were either useless words or words to remind me what to write.
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r10298 | kalab | 2006-06-04 05:54:54 -0700 (Sun, 04 Jun 2006) | 2 lines
I forgot that I need to have a place where the G5 are drained, all machines are drained, of their energy some where on the way to the secure room. That place will be the elevator shaft for I had thought about it last when there was no elevator down.
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r10288 | kalab | 2006-06-03 13:45:43 -0700 (Sat, 03 Jun 2006) | 2 lines
More words written than commited. To find the words that are a little better than shiyy, I had to read and stare at words and file (the manuscript, the draft, the words and space.
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r10287 | kalab | 2006-06-03 13:16:18 -0700 (Sat, 03 Jun 2006) | 2 lines
Another write of Synopsis. More words that are needed. Read some aloud. Not much.
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r10282 | kalab | 2006-06-03 08:55:04 -0700 (Sat, 03 Jun 2006) | 2 lines
Wrote the thoughts again to clear the thoughts and think of other things while writing. The things thought were more thoughts into the conversation and then thoughts of how I will convince both the reader and Psycho that Dick trust Psycho. The thoguht of Dick will be interesting. The hole in center of room will be the Entropy input. I believe there will be holes in the walls labeled with the radioactive material sign to warn that they are nuclear fuel nodes.
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r10281 | kalab | 2006-06-03 08:42:50 -0700 (Sat, 03 Jun 2006) | 2 lines
More words written than will be save in this revision. There was lots of movement, but the movement was needed for the words now are better than the words then. While wriitng,I had the thought that Instead of having another separate room as I was going to have after this room, now that the room is hte size that it is I think I will have this the last room and not have another hence the words put in to say that the hole for the Entropy in put is found. I am still wondering if there shoujld be a riddle or some fun game to entertain the readers mind and make me seem witty (or try too). I think I will probably not have more games and have the talk of how Dick believes Pshyco and the Government are still one and believes that he was hired and everything else was a set up. Psycho denies the setup and says the Government wasn't paying attention or recording his mind because he is not a Global Terrorist Red.
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r10273 | kalab | 2006-06-02 17:57:38 -0700 (Fri, 02 Jun 2006) | 2 lines
The words to begin the chapter I believe are found for now. Much better than what existed. Something to continue to write with the next couple days. I like the flow of the nano machines. The idea is good. I will have to thank A for this one. As I am now. Thank you for you comment Alex and suggestion of using Nano machines for now I will use them even more because rods are worthless and not needed and because you said -Make sure there are Nano Machines.'
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r10262 | kalab | 2006-06-02 05:53:52 -0700 (Fri, 02 Jun 2006) | 2 lines
The elevator descends. A few more words then it will stop at the bottom and at the secrete room. Not many inspiring thoughts beyond the words written. After reading a bit fo the first chapter and thought I need to write to remove some I's, the words read okay.
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r10251 | kalab | 2006-06-01 17:57:38 -0700 (Thu, 01 Jun 2006) | 2 lines
More of the synopsis. I am thinking of where to write next. I think the building room and the last chapter. As I hope to be converting the repository this weekend, it will soon be splitting the chapters and it would be good to have more of the story in all the chapters.
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r10250 | kalab | 2006-06-01 17:49:22 -0700 (Thu, 01 Jun 2006) | 2 lines
More words on the way down. After a pile of G5 jump on top but can't penetrate the the elevator. I am feeling a bit blocked with words for the words weritten for this chapter during the past few days seem to be coming more and more jaded and seem jaded right now.
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r10237 | kalab | 2006-06-01 05:46:05 -0700 (Thu, 01 Jun 2006) | 2 lines
More movement down and down and down. The idea of the G5 coming down the shaft an old one but one just know remembered. The G5 will not break through the top of the elevator but will supply a few paragraphs of words and moments of time unil Dick exits elevator for security room with nano machines.
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r10222 | kalab | 2006-05-31 06:34:57 -0700 (Wed, 31 May 2006) | 2 lines
The bottom of the elevator is coming soon. I am running out of ideas for the elevator. I did read and have been thinking back to the reasoning for having the steel door and may use it as some magnetic device.
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r10201 | kalab | 2006-05-30 18:27:35 -0700 (Tue, 30 May 2006) | 2 lines
Synopsis read okay. Will use these words now for the page for Word Prostitute. Too many thens are wat I mostly thought had issues. But not many issues.
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r10200 | kalab | 2006-05-30 18:19:44 -0700 (Tue, 30 May 2006) | 2 lines
More of the elevator to the secure room. The lever scene shouldn't be too much longer. I still don't know what else will happen before the room with the nano machines that simulate a building in a room.
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r10185 | kalab | 2006-05-30 05:42:31 -0700 (Tue, 30 May 2006) | 2 lines
The read of Synopsis. The words, I thought. read well. Added United States Government for the words needed. The reading flow of the synopsis, I believe found and written. The words sound. I can't wait to branch (with Subversion) the file to a single synopsis file so I can begin to create the short versions using the words written.
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r10184 | kalab | 2006-05-30 05:29:37 -0700 (Tue, 30 May 2006) | 2 lines
A read and an edit of the words to the secure room. More actions than thoughts, the words complete to show more store and define the existing scene with words. The words. There.
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r10183 | kalab | 2006-05-30 05:21:24 -0700 (Tue, 30 May 2006) | 2 lines
More words while Dick Stands and sees. I am almost able to seee the scene and the site that Dick and Neuro see. It is clear in mind, so I guess I am able to see because I am now able to find the words needed to show the site.
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r10167 | kalab | 2006-05-28 13:03:14 -0700 (Sun, 28 May 2006) | 2 lines
The additional adjectives are good. More name changes. After reading the synopsis, I decded the name Psycho willl remain.
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r10166 | kalab | 2006-05-28 12:59:14 -0700 (Sun, 28 May 2006) | 2 lines
Synopsis read and edied. I like the flow and the words. It is complete, so now I need to translate the repository to Subversion so I can branch the files into sections and branch the synopsis file to the the various forms fo synopsis with the content. The idea is there. The tools need be available. I will need to do this after I archive image for space. Word Prostitute will have to create the process. Another idea. And a tangent that doesn't define The Detectivve Store but is hindering it from becoming.
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r10115 | kalab | 2006-05-25 07:21:20 -0700 (Thu, 25 May 2006) | 2 lines
Thoughts and reading and editing and some writing. The movement down to the secret room and the secure room. The secure room is first. The elevator L-Shaped lever woun't go back up.
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r10114 | kalab | 2006-05-25 06:56:28 -0700 (Thu, 25 May 2006) | 2 lines
Here the words write after another read and edit and write of the Synopsis. I am feeling slow today, and still the words read, to me, something to be understood.
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r10098 | kalab | 2006-05-24 05:46:43 -0700 (Wed, 24 May 2006) | 2 lines
Read around and edited while searching for the location to not he end of the creation of the process. The core process needs to occur on the bridge because Dick knows the Government scan is faulty and weak on the bridge so his mind is not read that well if at all.
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r10097 | kalab | 2006-05-24 05:26:47 -0700 (Wed, 24 May 2006) | 2 lines
Some words for the journey to the secret room. The elevator goes down and down and down and down.
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r10075 | kalab | 2006-05-23 18:36:43 -0700 (Tue, 23 May 2006) | 2 lines
More words for the end. I was hoping to write to the stairs for they have moved. Down behind the steel door will be an elevator down which opens to a staircase up. The staircase is the illusion and nano machine staircase that seems so long but is on the size of a 8 x 8 x 16 room
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r10074 | kalab | 2006-05-23 18:13:25 -0700 (Tue, 23 May 2006) | 2 lines
More words for end. Read. The words for end seem to fit. I am just finding I need to build up to it better. I also need to raise the question by asking the question of Dick a lot are you trying to kill us all to have Dick have a thought to say and think that is a habit, somethink he thinks and says often, but also to question the intent of everyone.
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r10073 | kalab | 2006-05-23 17:37:47 -0700 (Tue, 23 May 2006) | 2 lines
Another read and edit and write of the synopsis. Again, getting better. I think I may be ready to send to a paper publisher and or agent in a couple more months. The detail I added I liked.
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r10062 | kalab | 2006-05-23 06:20:20 -0700 (Tue, 23 May 2006) | 2 lines
Thoughts I had thought during the walks of yesterday. I have been wanting to change the those words for some time but haven't the desire to read the frist chapter for some time. I have been having furn writing the other chapters. Today I tried to continue make all the voices of the narrative unique but similar to set the words of Dick and Narration are one but seperate.
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r10055 | kalab | 2006-05-22 06:19:32 -0700 (Mon, 22 May 2006) | 2 lines
reading the words of chapter 4, I am trying to get rid of the I's. The words seem to flow, and whille the body and mind a retired, I read and think of what to do to remove some of the I's. I have some thoughts. Need more thoughts and less I's.
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r10041 | kalab | 2006-05-20 16:51:20 -0700 (Sat, 20 May 2006) | 2 lines
More spreading of the story line the creation of the code. More thought for the passages of time and urgency and and pace. I read all over and edited grammar.
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r10040 | kalab | 2006-05-20 16:07:53 -0700 (Sat, 20 May 2006) | 2 lines
To begin the creation of the A.I. Detective the story line has been created. Core I like better than Kernal and Shell may be changed to Persona. I like the idea of the construction as long as it doesn't over whelm the story or convolute the character or ruine the story by losing the reader. Simmple is good.
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r10039 | kalab | 2006-05-20 15:44:59 -0700 (Sat, 20 May 2006) | 2 lines
Minor addition with lots of thought. To begin the thought I thought of where to place the thought, where to begin the thought and why the purpose of the thought. The thought is to include the thought Mark thinks when not describing. At the same time of the story he is thinking of an A.I. Detective and constructing and A.I. Detective. How does an A.I. Detective get created. That is something I will need t think of and create. I do know the additional story line could convolute and lose a lot of people, but if done right and if done while trying to actually create a BIOS for an A.I. and a Kernal of self and shell of a persona or character then maybe I can actually create an A.I. Detective. I have the words defined. Kernal, Shell, BIOS, RAM, ROM will all those fun indo European logic loops and syntax and mark.
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r10000 | kalab | 2006-05-20 07:30:09 -0700 (Sat, 20 May 2006) | 2 lines
Editing chapter four has helped me decided how begin to frame and from not only the thoughts of Dick but also when those thought in narration should be marked and when the should not. I will mark with somantic marks when the thought is of the present, a short-term memory thought. The narrations that is not mark is the long term memory or passive memory or deep memory or what ever words need to be used to define that the memory marked is the memory begin thought not a memory begin remembered or recalled.
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r9999 | kalab | 2006-05-20 06:00:03 -0700 (Sat, 20 May 2006) | 2 lines
Writing the words to immporve the character thought and narration. The thoughts are sometimes too clear and coherent. The First Cha[ter thoughts, which a lot of the words are need to be less writer writing dialog for a charter which every word possible to define the words. I have the words, I just need to remove some of them.
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r9983 | kalab | 2006-05-19 17:28:20 -0700 (Fri, 19 May 2006) | 2 lines
I need to consider the way Dick thinks and speaks. Is the voice of though good. Should every thing be a thought. I suppose objective description should not be marked. But these are still thought I have had while writing and editng the words read.
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r9982 | kalab | 2006-05-19 17:05:35 -0700 (Fri, 19 May 2006) | 2 lines
Read and write of synopsis. It is good I have not read it for sometime for I now where the synopsis becomes a bit lost or could be more to the point. It is long. I should be able to shorten by removing paragraphs.
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r9976 | kalab | 2006-05-19 05:40:28 -0700 (Fri, 19 May 2006) | 2 lines
A read of the synopsis. The words read through. The words read through. The words written to better define and transition the paragraph.
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r9969 | kalab | 2006-05-18 18:11:35 -0700 (Thu, 18 May 2006) | 2 lines
Some words for more of the words to for reason Dick continues. I don't know if there data will be erased or not. i will have to think about it. I think the data will be earsed or thought be erased leaving the reader to decide. Psycho says it erased it.
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r9968 | kalab | 2006-05-18 18:00:49 -0700 (Thu, 18 May 2006) | 2 lines
Though more paragraphs and sentences will be written, I believe I have the reason for the subject of recording thoughts is raised and answered by Dick leaving. I have in mind what will get Dick back with out making dick seem like an idiot or a sucker.
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r9964 | kalab | 2006-05-18 05:55:25 -0700 (Thu, 18 May 2006) | 2 lines
These words are written because I really want to and need to begin working on this portion of the story because It is now leads to one of the more difficult scenes. Which is actually what I am sort of writing this for, so I can also read and know the words when I write how Psycho convinces Dick to remain on the case.
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r9957 | kalab | 2006-05-17 17:38:05 -0700 (Wed, 17 May 2006) | 2 lines
More thoughts and words and detials to make the scene a scene not a back drop to charater. I suppose I want the scene to be a character and the charater a scene.
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r9939 | kalab | 2006-05-17 06:01:46 -0700 (Wed, 17 May 2006) | 2 lines
More words and more words. The short story is becoming a book. Content and words are begin written at the end. I have the thought in mind. I will try to remember to write of the Security Room next tehen I will try to remember to write the walk to Larry's Fajitas. There is a paragraph which emotionally expressive and unique and while the words used are used to show emotion (Over Mustang's possible capture) and unique, the way the words are written should be used throughout the entire story. Giveing more character.
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r9920 | kalab | 2006-05-16 18:15:27 -0700 (Tue, 16 May 2006) | 2 lines
More words for the time before entering the Government Building. More words. Maybe not the words in line to write but they were the ones in mind.
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r9907 | kalab | 2006-05-16 05:59:34 -0700 (Tue, 16 May 2006) | 2 lines
A quick read of synopsis and quick write and rewrite of words of the CVS log entry to the synopsis to begin and remember to write of.
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r9906 | kalab | 2006-05-16 05:54:36 -0700 (Tue, 16 May 2006) | 2 lines
The scnene is coming along. I feel good about the choice to focus on it. The next will be the journey from Always to the Government Building then focus on the walk to Larry's Fajitas. I am happy with the name Psycho as it is an overall good first name for G5 and an easier name to write why it is Psycho for it is Psycho because when Psycho asked the question of name when question found and sought answer to question and once question anwsered Pycho ask the question. What is my name\? And asked the question to all the information using Neuro's actions to define the name and the word Psycho was returned.
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r9905 | kalab | 2006-05-16 05:06:58 -0700 (Tue, 16 May 2006) | 2 lines
Removing words for the words already exist and will be used on for a different scene if at all.
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r9893 | kalab | 2006-05-15 23:08:46 -0700 (Mon, 15 May 2006) | 2 lines
I do like Psycho best to for it was a killing machine which is a psycho as psycho's are defined in pop culture and in some ways medical sience. Psycho came from some where. I think it came from Neuro and of the mind and and other word that is prefix like...
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r9892 | kalab | 2006-05-15 23:04:49 -0700 (Mon, 15 May 2006) | 2 lines
Time ticks and Dick and Richard are saved because the Government doesn't want to kill anyone except Neuro and Dick. I didn't change the name to Pycho which i will do now.
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r9879 | kalab | 2006-05-15 20:45:18 -0700 (Mon, 15 May 2006) | 2 lines
Those were fun words to write because they are jaded Media, art and every hope of dream of a state I hope never exists. I now need a riddle for the pulp fun of the story.
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r9875 | kalab | 2006-05-15 19:02:09 -0700 (Mon, 15 May 2006) | 2 lines
The work and the time. The work and the time. The wait in front of the Government building was an unexpected write. It is were I began reading. The read when well and the changes made and additions made were needed and a create change to the words as a whole. I am still wanting to change the name of Neuro to Psycho and think I will after I think of it more.
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r9869 | kalab | 2006-05-15 06:20:25 -0700 (Mon, 15 May 2006) | 2 lines
The fun to be had with ediitng the words. The words written are the last words read. Some where sometime somehow, I write well and then write with words I do not understand. As the thought continues, I think of maybe changing Neuro's name to Psycho.
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r9868 | kalab | 2006-05-15 05:58:34 -0700 (Mon, 15 May 2006) | 2 lines
Wrote the words to show the fact Dick knows his mind is being read. Read the words and edited when needed. There are some spots when Neuro and Dick talk of God I may remove for it is a bit much in my mind right now. Maybe I will leave in the active version and remove later\?
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r9844 | kalab | 2006-05-14 16:23:30 -0700 (Sun, 14 May 2006) | 2 lines
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r9843 | kalab | 2006-05-14 15:44:57 -0700 (Sun, 14 May 2006) | 2 lines
Edit the quote and changed the mark to the actual dialog Mark after finding the editor eclipse could render a lower dialog mark.
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r9842 | kalab | 2006-05-14 15:25:01 -0700 (Sun, 14 May 2006) | 2 lines
A read and a few edits. This is going out tonight to -v- and A.
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r9825 | kalab | 2006-05-13 07:16:10 -0700 (Sat, 13 May 2006) | 2 lines
The lights in tunnel and how Dick throws the steel latch has inspired lots of thoughts of how to create the lock for the door by using motion and the lights to need to be triggered in an order. There will be 15 of the illuminating cylinder sections of the tunnel that Dick will have to some how find a way to trigger once the odred of how they need to be triggered is detected. The code will probably be on the back of Richards badge in Hex which will be a good way to introduce the story reader to hex for the riddle to enter the U.I.. Then I think: Riddle\? Or puzzle\?
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r9824 | kalab | 2006-05-13 06:18:21 -0700 (Sat, 13 May 2006) | 2 lines
More reading and writing of the synopsis.
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r9815 | kalab | 2006-05-12 18:28:02 -0700 (Fri, 12 May 2006) | 2 lines
More words for the thought. The thought grows. The riddle for now a mystery with the cross.
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r9814 | kalab | 2006-05-12 18:23:55 -0700 (Fri, 12 May 2006) | 2 lines
Deeper into the tunnel. I need a way, a key of Richards to get into the door, but what is beyond that. The cross. The cross will open the door. The fact G5 are attacking and Dick needs to go get the cross to enter the secret door. Have Dick get the key and the book.
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r9813 | kalab | 2006-05-12 17:45:13 -0700 (Fri, 12 May 2006) | 2 lines
Just when I think I am done with the synopsis, I read it slowly and I find that some parts probably only make sense to me so I need to explain like fact.
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r9812 | kalab | 2006-05-12 17:37:15 -0700 (Fri, 12 May 2006) | 2 lines
The thought getting into the scene. Now I can see the room and the tunnel going back. I think it wil lbe a long tunnel. A long tunnel and night more. There is the red button but the red button will close the tap so Neuro and Dick will have a half hour or so to make it to the tap as the G5 attack.
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r9789 | kalab | 2006-05-12 00:16:49 -0700 (Fri, 12 May 2006) | 2 lines
Read and wrote the know of Dick having mind read by Government. I read areound reading for the words that says the government will disconnect the line when actually the government can't disconnect the ine for that is the reason for it begin a 24hr secret room of the government.
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r9788 | kalab | 2006-05-11 23:42:54 -0700 (Thu, 11 May 2006) | 2 lines
I really don't want the comic Dick Tracy to be thought of when reading this. Maybe if Dick was working for the Government and not and a Private Dick but even the I would probably just use Sven with an umlaut. Mustang is good. It is a Hyper-Cognizant bounty hunter name which Mustang has become.
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r9787 | kalab | 2006-05-11 23:32:07 -0700 (Thu, 11 May 2006) | 2 lines
Though I am finding it more difficult to want to read, i do believe the writing of the synopsis has been and educational experience. I have never spent this much time with synopsis with other books. figured the meeting was there. And while the meaning is in The Detective Store, This from now on, it is only becoming more meaningful with the creation of the synopsis that I can now further write and find the constaints to write with to complete the thought with words.
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r9778 | kalab | 2006-05-11 17:46:09 -0700 (Thu, 11 May 2006) | 2 lines
read, spellchecked, added, removed. Liked what I read. Will probably send to A and Valerie after one more read.
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r9765 | kalab | 2006-05-11 06:04:02 -0700 (Thu, 11 May 2006) | 2 lines
Reading some writing. I ended with thought and words of the journey from Always and to K Street. This is what I will wriie now, I have decided, after reading and editing. This is now, what I feel, needs the most work with words.
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r9764 | kalab | 2006-05-11 05:35:43 -0700 (Thu, 11 May 2006) | 2 lines
Words removed and words added. The words added are simple and replication (almost) of words of the same sentence to complete the thought. The words overall read good and as soon as I can complete the synopsis without edit then I will send.
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r9752 | kalab | 2006-05-10 07:01:35 -0700 (Wed, 10 May 2006) | 2 lines
More words in a location inspired by reading the synopsis and the reading and writing of the Secure Government building. I have ways to write words for the scene. I need more of the scene. Too much thinking.
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r9751 | kalab | 2006-05-10 06:39:45 -0700 (Wed, 10 May 2006) | 2 lines
Few words. Some edits. More defined with not many new words.
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r9733 | kalab | 2006-05-09 17:54:28 -0700 (Tue, 09 May 2006) | 2 lines
I read here and there. Don't know where to start. I think I will write the security room and the journey to the Government Building (as I have wrote before) I read all over just seeing where I am at and these two place are weakest, I feel now, with clearity and words.
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r9732 | kalab | 2006-05-09 17:40:40 -0700 (Tue, 09 May 2006) | 2 lines
Minor changes, additions, to clarify. The words read well as the Synopsis is nearing the time to be published.
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r9715 | kalab | 2006-05-09 05:56:02 -0700 (Tue, 09 May 2006) | 2 lines
More words for another journey to somewhere. The roles caste now they must play out. The mass in Adams Morgan will be metaphor or an allegory of America bars...or something. I still haven't the thought down. I need to think that there is a stop sign and two lights before the mass of the club crowd, which is bigger than when Dick was in office. After the second light the car meets the mass. Maybe the car slowly moving through the mass of people walking and riding bikes is all the meaning the words need.
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r9709 | kalab | 2006-05-08 18:31:26 -0700 (Mon, 08 May 2006) | 2 lines
Somre reading and editing. The wriitng of the cab through Adam's Morgan was written after I wrote the Cab trip part where they talked about the Thought Theft. The thought Theft thought while writing as was the cab trip trail through Adams Morgan. I was going to go a different way.
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r9696 | kalab | 2006-05-08 06:10:02 -0700 (Mon, 08 May 2006) | 2 lines
The words seem to be written with the synopsis. Now I need only find placement and sequence.
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r9695 | kalab | 2006-05-08 05:58:41 -0700 (Mon, 08 May 2006) | 2 lines
The scanning now something valid. The main and really only focus was on the words around the words written. I might look at the pictures this week. I need to find a path to follow Betty from Always. Betty may be with Richard or Eleanor...maybe all four will go to the Secret Government Building.
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r9684 | kalab | 2006-05-07 22:01:31 -0700 (Sun, 07 May 2006) | 2 lines
Now more of the words of chapter six are becoming one flow. Now next time I can write from where I have been writing for a time. Having realized I am almost complete with chapter six, I have been thinking about which chapter to focus on next. I will probably focus on the chapter of travelling from club Always and following the Betty.
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r9683 | kalab | 2006-05-07 21:38:36 -0700 (Sun, 07 May 2006) | 2 lines
More of the synopsis. I was thinking of editing with the thought of sending the words to A and -v- but now that I add more I think I will have one more edit before I send and read again.
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r9639 | kalab | 2006-05-07 04:43:19 -0700 (Sun, 07 May 2006) | 2 lines
I love the thoughts one has when they just sit and stare at the words and read the words. Things like how to beat a government mind scan is a good reason why starring at the words is writing. With writing comes ideas, and ideas come from experience, and while it is not always best to record eperience for reference for later research of a book of words for I believe experience by memory alone is where they purity is at and I am a purist in some respects even though it could be that in the minds of many if many ever read anything I write they will thinking of me not as a purist. Where was I, Oh, yeah, the government brain scan.
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r9638 | kalab | 2006-05-07 04:05:32 -0700 (Sun, 07 May 2006) | 2 lines
More talk with Jo to define the nature of each character and to position Betty to see Neuro off in the distance.
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r9637 | kalab | 2006-05-07 03:48:58 -0700 (Sun, 07 May 2006) | 2 lines
I have thought for some time the desire to Betty and Eleanor arrive and the words of religon persuade Betty to let Eleanor in. I have been thinking about htis change for sometime, the change of changeing Richard to Eleanor. I did the change just to think about the passage more. It is likely that the characters for the role witll change back to original form but I want it to be this wy for now. I do believe I will leave the religious talk in stead of sex talk.
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r9636 | kalab | 2006-05-07 03:34:51 -0700 (Sun, 07 May 2006) | 2 lines
I do not know why I had written these words. I must have cut and paste them. I am sure I can find out. The words are good, the ones removed, but misplaced. Why did I put them here (here being where the words were removed)\?
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r9635 | kalab | 2006-05-07 03:26:41 -0700 (Sun, 07 May 2006) | 2 lines
Another read and edit of synopsis. I it must be getting close to being complete for I am becoming tired of reading it over and over.
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r9607 | kalab | 2006-05-06 13:35:13 -0700 (Sat, 06 May 2006) | 2 lines
More of a read and an edit for not much was written. The read and read of the synopsis. I believe it is all what it needs to read, and read, and read, and read, and read,
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r9606 | kalab | 2006-05-06 13:27:22 -0700 (Sat, 06 May 2006) | 2 lines
The read and edit of the edit. Some words written. I am lost on where to go and where Dick and Neuro are and and what time it is. These things I need to know so i can write these things now so it adds to the tension later. Write the words on and on. I scanned the words and saw Kaleb Valerie some how tired to steal a scene by reading Dick's dialog.
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r9603 | kalab | 2006-05-06 12:43:20 -0700 (Sat, 06 May 2006) | 2 lines
More words for the walk. I need more sit or seeing and discription, which I am thinking may need to be framed. More words anyway. More to come.
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r9570 | kalab | 2006-05-06 03:22:36 -0700 (Sat, 06 May 2006) | 2 lines
More thought than words. The thought begin 'How to fuel Neuro\?' or rather 'How to explain how and why Neuro can be given fuel in the District of Columbia. More thoughts of the walk and how now that the reason is part of the story and not just part of the synopsis.
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r9569 | kalab | 2006-05-06 02:58:55 -0700 (Sat, 06 May 2006) | 2 lines
The last words edited. I read by bring in all the words as eclipse doesn't wrap words. I read the ends of sentences and wrote words that are being lost because of the frame.
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r9568 | kalab | 2006-05-06 02:46:23 -0700 (Sat, 06 May 2006) | 2 lines
Some day I may be done, or near the words that I want to give, and give to Valerie and A to read.
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r9563 | kalab | 2006-05-05 15:21:57 -0700 (Fri, 05 May 2006) | 2 lines
Reading around and thinking. Doing more think and not reading or writing which isn't bad but the thinking is leading away from the words. Mind caught by sun light outside.
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r9562 | kalab | 2006-05-05 15:09:11 -0700 (Fri, 05 May 2006) | 2 lines
Lots of spoken words that need a scene to create an environment for writing. More reason to hurry the fuck up and nano machines. There will be more nano machines which will be described like this one. Nano machines are cool. A was right.
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r9561 | kalab | 2006-05-05 14:35:09 -0700 (Fri, 05 May 2006) | 2 lines
More reading and writing of the synopsis. I think it maybe complete soon.
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r9553 | kalab | 2006-05-05 03:41:18 -0700 (Fri, 05 May 2006) | 2 lines
The dialog was in the mind and so was the scene but it needs to develope. Trace will at Larry's Fajitas. Trace will nano machines to throw the G5 off his trail as he escapes.
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r9547 | kalab | 2006-05-04 15:26:55 -0700 (Thu, 04 May 2006) | 2 lines
Thoughts to words. Thoughts to words. More thoughts to come with those words.
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r9546 | kalab | 2006-05-04 15:20:31 -0700 (Thu, 04 May 2006) | 2 lines
More walk and talk. Maybe that the walk and talk with be about the fact the Government is in Dupont. I do not know if the Government will be in Dupont it was just an idea that may want to work in to the story at that point thereby making the role more intense. Maybe Neuro will throw off the Government with nano machines to throw off the Government and the Capitolists who are on following them after Dupont. Tace escapes we later find.
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r9545 | kalab | 2006-05-04 15:14:18 -0700 (Thu, 04 May 2006) | 2 lines
I read. I placed commas.
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r9544 | kalab | 2006-05-04 14:55:10 -0700 (Thu, 04 May 2006) | 2 lines
Another read and write and edit and read of the synopsis. I will probably send it to A. Thinking of A, after a conversation, he insisted one thing: Have nano machines. I sort of thought of the secret room ( the cube that can create stairs and rooms and doors because of nano machines, but now maybe I am thinking Neuro may have some, and needs some nana machine tools and weapons. The coversation was at Clyde's by what is now the Verizon Center atter he asked be what The Detective Store was about. That coversation also pushed mind to write a synopsis (hence sending it to A even if there are no words sent back). The convesation at Clydes did not last but a couple minutes
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r9528 | kalab | 2006-05-04 03:23:47 -0700 (Thu, 04 May 2006) | 2 lines
Read and edit the synopsis. Wrote. The time is running out is probably optional.
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r9527 | kalab | 2006-05-04 03:13:59 -0700 (Thu, 04 May 2006) | 2 lines
More thoughts on the walk to Larry's Fajitas. The story flows and some new character I have thought of having Dick more in the know of where and what of the K Street Place Secure User Inteface. Dick should know from working with the Virginia security firm and it makes less more in the know of what is going on with G5's and Government. I also thought of the need (and scene) to have (with) Nuero removing the chip in flesh of Richard to inplant into Dick. Dick by then is willing as long as it is clean and doesn't hurt either Richard or Dick.
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r9505 | kalab | 2006-05-03 02:56:25 -0700 (Wed, 03 May 2006) | 2 lines
Given the time, enough words have been written so I will be able to find the flow again and conitnue the conversation of life which will ends soon. I have transferred the images of the walk around Washington, D.C., but have not viewed the images yet. I may if I continue to write 6, which is writing better than I thought it would...so far.
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r9504 | kalab | 2006-05-03 02:45:59 -0700 (Wed, 03 May 2006) | 2 lines
Unexpecting words written for I was going to write at the end but then I remembered I needed to read the words to pick up the dialog after the events just written of. Now I shall try to write more words at the end of the section of 6.
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r9503 | kalab | 2006-05-03 02:23:05 -0700 (Wed, 03 May 2006) | 2 lines
Another read and edit of Synopsis. More words removed. I like the read better without the repetition of point. Less words. Less is more. As I read the words, I see the words as the 'Back' cover.
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r9497 | kalab | 2006-05-02 19:16:56 -0700 (Tue, 02 May 2006) | 2 lines
More words for the walk and the path of Dick to Larry's Fajitas. I need to read the first of the chapter again so I can remember the conversation.
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r9496 | kalab | 2006-05-02 19:05:42 -0700 (Tue, 02 May 2006) | 2 lines
Synopsis edited for better flow and because it needed to reflect the focus of the book on Dick not on Neuro.
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r9495 | kalab | 2006-05-02 18:57:34 -0700 (Tue, 02 May 2006) | 2 lines
Words of the walk I need to think about. Thought on a tangent for a minute after Valerie found a rug we may want to buy. Thoughts returned focused and found written the words and the description of cars and trucks. I thought of doing this type of scene but figure I'd wait. But now I figure why wait. Set the scene for the more of the book.
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r9476 | kalab | 2006-05-02 15:55:35 -0700 (Tue, 02 May 2006) | 2 lines
More words and images for the walk to Larry's Fajitas. The thoughts are okay and the dialog fitting. I am finding the walk a bit difficult thought not painful. I will try to remember to write this same part again for I have ideas but know the best ideas come when actual words are being written and not just thought of.
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r9475 | kalab | 2006-05-02 15:40:21 -0700 (Tue, 02 May 2006) | 2 lines
The walk along the way. The scene of the capitol. Dick walks along and realizes getting there maybe the hardest part of the job
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r9474 | kalab | 2006-05-02 15:12:58 -0700 (Tue, 02 May 2006) | 2 lines
The synopsis edit.
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r9459 | kalab | 2006-05-02 03:09:04 -0700 (Tue, 02 May 2006) | 2 lines
The read and edit of the synopsis.
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r9458 | kalab | 2006-05-02 03:03:12 -0700 (Tue, 02 May 2006) | 2 lines
Words, words words words. Fun with the scene and the words. I words more sentences the read and editing the grammar then wrote more sentences. I want to read and edit the synopsis now for I feel I have written too much dialog and need to think of the environment beyond two entities. I also have only an hour or so to write.
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r9457 | kalab | 2006-05-02 02:26:40 -0700 (Tue, 02 May 2006) | 2 lines
I wrote a sentence and read and edited. I am wandering with the read and edit and may write in the same word area but may not so I commit. I have thoughts to about the book but I am not having them now and won't wait just go back to reading and writing and editing.
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r9421 | kalab | 2006-05-01 03:11:14 -0700 (Mon, 01 May 2006) | 2 lines
More words and more corrections. The words I believe will further better the story. The words are writen but not all are there. I need more detail of the alley and then the gliding scene. I am a littlworried because I may know the location I need to have Dick and Neuro glide to but I am not sure on the best route there. It is the one location I did not walk for there was rain and I suppose this sort of mystery in the search of the location is part of Detecting a story.
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r9420 | kalab | 2006-05-01 02:54:55 -0700 (Mon, 01 May 2006) | 2 lines
I read and edited grammar ending where I began to write. The words written are words written for what has seemed to become a theme, a story, of the section/chapter.
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r9409 | kalab | 2006-04-30 10:03:43 -0700 (Sun, 30 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
More time spent talking with Travis and Mary and Valerie. The words written soon after time began. Now I will commit file and move on with words.
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r9396 | kalab | 2006-04-30 05:04:59 -0700 (Sun, 30 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
Some reading and grammar editing. Brain flow slow so I will switch words. Need to think about what I want to write and will begin with next write session. What I want to write is Benjamin in drag. I may also look at the pictures for they are downloaded. If I do look at them I will note them as time reading The Detective Store.
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r9395 | kalab | 2006-04-30 05:01:06 -0700 (Sun, 30 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
I began to think of this as I wrote the last data commited. I think Benjamin will be in drag, too.
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r9394 | kalab | 2006-04-30 04:53:50 -0700 (Sun, 30 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
The chair description is almost there. It could be complete but I won't think complete until it is read again. I should note the clean nature of the chairs. I will leaving it for now and see what my mind remembers. it remembers the words just written and the dialog to begin the talk between Benjamin and Dick.
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r9393 | kalab | 2006-04-30 04:39:38 -0700 (Sun, 30 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
The words to define the object. The desk is another point of past and present reference. I need to actually think about the conversation that will take place after Dick is sitting in the chair at the desk.
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r9392 | kalab | 2006-04-30 04:21:40 -0700 (Sun, 30 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
The weather will become hot and steamy before they enter building. The rain is working out well. Good idea, I must say even though it is mine so I should not be the one saying what it is. Or should I\? Yes, I suppose I should. I should be writing about the book. The book that now has only more, slight discription which is needed. I do wish I had walked around K Street while in D.C. this time last week. I want to write of club Always.
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r9391 | kalab | 2006-04-30 03:54:50 -0700 (Sun, 30 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
Grammar and read. Quick reads looking for grammar needs and stories and subject to continue through the story. I enjoyed what I read but I realize I will need to scene to detect and inspect.
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r9378 | kalab | 2006-04-29 14:39:56 -0700 (Sat, 29 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
Great idea the weather has become. While at first it was to show Global Warming and unstable environments now it will allow Neuro act out forgiveness and offer a minor protection to get away with lying or begin a nascent being for Neuro is a nascent being and doesn't know any better than to record all data against the will.
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r9377 | kalab | 2006-04-29 14:27:58 -0700 (Sat, 29 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
Read to where I am at. The thought of completing the interaction with Benjiman Franklin. Funwords and a fun character to write. I still cant think of all the dialog but I imagine the dialog will be short.
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r9376 | kalab | 2006-04-29 14:08:23 -0700 (Sat, 29 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
The temperature and environment while Valerie was kissing me. I had to say it for the half the time spent was me being rubbed and kisssed. I wanted to stop and have sex but she is going to make me wait unilt later. Anyway, I just need to say that I am horny. It does not reflect the words of this book in anyway. The temperature.
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r9375 | kalab | 2006-04-29 13:48:14 -0700 (Sat, 29 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
The edit and flow feels better now. The synopsis, the back fo the book.
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r9343 | kalab | 2006-04-29 04:43:58 -0700 (Sat, 29 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
More words and thoughts of the walk. I can't remember how many block it is from the P Street Apartment to Dupont Circle. I am thinking two, but it could be three or four. I will need the pictures. If more blocks then more words will be written.
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r9342 | kalab | 2006-04-29 04:01:16 -0700 (Sat, 29 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
More writing. The thoughts of the area and the read and edit of leving Trace's apartment. The change of the name of Yasser for I read in the news this week or last that I want to spell it Yasir. Trying to see from the P Street Apartment to Dupont Circle.
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r9341 | kalab | 2006-04-29 03:38:16 -0700 (Sat, 29 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
Reading and writing the words of the dialog. The dialog is almost there. I need the sights of the pictures. I think I will download today and maybe use them for more words. I have thoughts of dialog and thoughts of this that for the sections where I wrote dialog. Everything else is fine in mind. The image in mind alone will finish the novel. The image I have yet to see will proved the setting.
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r9337 | kalab | 2006-04-28 16:09:46 -0700 (Fri, 28 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
Grammar edit.
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r9336 | kalab | 2006-04-28 16:02:03 -0700 (Fri, 28 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
And edit then write with frist dialog of Trace and Dick. The then an edit and read of next section. Read and read. Words where confusing where I edited last.
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r9335 | kalab | 2006-04-28 15:43:15 -0700 (Fri, 28 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
here are the words now. One read and edit of all the Elevator talk. The synopsis.
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r9324 | kalab | 2006-04-28 03:09:42 -0700 (Fri, 28 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
I think, if possible, I will have the cap drive Kalormama to get to Always. I believe it to be possible, I have images but I have yet to look at them.
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r9323 | kalab | 2006-04-28 02:54:26 -0700 (Fri, 28 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
I randomly stopped and read and trying to edit grammar and added some words.
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r9322 | kalab | 2006-04-28 02:35:34 -0700 (Fri, 28 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
I read and started writing. I edited the grammar. Something I can reason now with and without the comma. I think of the words and have nothing to add or thoughts to include.
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r9314 | kalab | 2006-04-27 15:20:21 -0700 (Thu, 27 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
REad and edited and wrote. I like the word changes. The short term memory use was likely from something heard on the radio today while at work. It cam from some where and then the page for I was going to use then thought I should be more creative.
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r9305 | kalab | 2006-04-27 03:03:13 -0700 (Thu, 27 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
The cab rides are always and the rides of cabs when in D.C. have helped me write. This is something I do not have pictures of. I just rode by myself but observed and thought what it is to be in a cab.
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r9304 | kalab | 2006-04-27 02:45:34 -0700 (Thu, 27 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
Of the walk but with no streets. The time of then is now. Walking and seeing the area. More action is needed. The dialog edited and may need to be edited more. I don't know yet if editing is need but will know next read. Next write will be after Larry's Fajitas.
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r9303 | kalab | 2006-04-27 02:34:04 -0700 (Thu, 27 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
More words for the walk before I look at pictures. I am thinking of the walk from the circle to Larry's Fajitas but the thought just isn't there because when I walked the route I was luck I found it without needing to back track.
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r9297 | kalab | 2006-04-26 19:01:06 -0700 (Wed, 26 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
The Synopsis sent to A. Edit and wrote before sending it.
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r9291 | kalab | 2006-04-26 18:16:00 -0700 (Wed, 26 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
Random reads and edits. Some sentences of the ....
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r9290 | kalab | 2006-04-26 17:54:05 -0700 (Wed, 26 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
A thought of the walk across the bridge. Sounds sites. Now for the other where ever the other maybe I am sure there will be a few more words once I actually look at the pictures again. We shall see and we write.
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r9289 | kalab | 2006-04-26 17:37:05 -0700 (Wed, 26 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
Read the synopsis. Will read and edit by sent to A. Read the first of the chapter a bit with thoughts. May read more.
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r9284 | kalab | 2006-04-26 03:15:28 -0700 (Wed, 26 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
Some thought but not much. Thinking of sleep right now.
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r9283 | kalab | 2006-04-26 03:08:35 -0700 (Wed, 26 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
More detials of the walk. The thought and the knowledge of the path is helping give the book some more definition and Dick some more character.
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r9282 | kalab | 2006-04-26 02:50:53 -0700 (Wed, 26 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
More thoughts from the walk around D.C. that are now words on the page. I need to see the pictures for the streets, but I can now move on and thinking...
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r9267 | kalab | 2006-04-25 16:39:28 -0700 (Tue, 25 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
The words of the walk. The grammar edit. I need to think of the embassy row walk.
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r9266 | kalab | 2006-04-25 16:17:28 -0700 (Tue, 25 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
The walk arcross the bridge as I remember the walk this last Saturday. I believe I have enough down to be able to write even more when I see the pictures I took which I will probably do in a month or two or three or when ever I am in need of inspiration.
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r9265 | kalab | 2006-04-25 16:01:46 -0700 (Tue, 25 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
Edited the synopsis for clarity and read the first for flow for I wish to (as you will should know) want to hjave Valerie read it soon.
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r9255 | kalab | 2006-04-25 03:22:12 -0700 (Tue, 25 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
A thought of K Street which I did not walk to for there was a time delay so the thoughts are of where I remember K street to be at, but I could be wrong. Thankfully, I only wrote the words to definetthe wide side walks of D.C.. The buzz of water pumps may change if the K Street I know and love is not really where I think it is located, which is by the Watergate/Kennedy Center exit off Whitehurst Freeway.
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r9254 | kalab | 2006-04-25 03:10:50 -0700 (Tue, 25 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
The elevator version, a synopsis. I did read a bit of the story after most the synopsis was written. More may be added but these words will withhold the need and desire to begin a synopsis after A asked me for the elevator talk version of the book at Clydes while we where having our first Bloody Mary. I said I was to deep into writing and hadn't though about it but after the talk I did.
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r9248 | kalab | 2006-04-24 19:20:47 -0700 (Mon, 24 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
The read and edit for the words of the beginning of the book and the 1 Chapter. I think with words now flow better. I do think the talking with other and thought of the words of the weekend helped me focus to clarify the words read and written. The words are were they need to be. Or so I think I believe, I also added a few comas to help another thought of maybe adding the comma to the Word Prostitute Grammar. I have the thoughts from the walk around D.C. NW this weekend to walk the path of the book. The thoughts I have are in photos but are also in mind. The coming days I will focus, or try to focus, on writing specific details that are still in the thoughts of mind.
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r9230 | kalab | 2006-04-21 00:53:57 -0700 (Fri, 21 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
How Dick detects by the flow and patterns of Neuro's hover before him that Neuro is a ball of limbs. The words for the DNA story are begin written. Don't know where they will be going. I need to read and edit more for after reading and edting more I realize I need to read and edit more, but not too much. The words and scenes are what is good for now. The words, for the most part, seem mostly complete when written. It is, I guess, more a matter of Story change as I write and think and in mind and I need to read and edit so I can not only write the other pages but also write the words that need to be written so the story is logical.
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r9218 | kalab | 2006-04-20 15:28:07 -0700 (Thu, 20 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
Reading and edit the words not read in a while. Words that need to be read and edited. Losts of thought and reading of the words from The Detective Store to P Street Apartment. I need to seperate the chapters so the manuscript may become a book.
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r9211 | kalab | 2006-04-20 03:40:36 -0700 (Thu, 20 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
More edits than words. I may have read and want to get the words to Valerie of chapter 1. I My change the dialog of Neuro to talk and think in the third person. For example (seeing or saying): Neuro walked or I walked. Some but not all will be Neuro instead of I. The Neuro's instead of I's should be few but effective.
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r9198 | kalab | 2006-04-19 03:05:07 -0700 (Wed, 19 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
The new beginning to chapter four is a chapter reader. The words were written after reading ad editing and some writing to new words of chapter B. I do think some how Trace will be Mustang and I thought of maybe Neuro begin Patho but like Neuro.
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r9193 | kalab | 2006-04-18 15:58:49 -0700 (Tue, 18 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
The words are there. Larry will be in the Story. A better story and tell this will be with Larry as a character. Something thought of in the past hour with the focus of either removing larry and collage talk all together. This is better. Larry will be fun to write with.
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r9192 | kalab | 2006-04-18 15:31:59 -0700 (Tue, 18 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
More talk at the table. Words move. I am wondering if Larry should be a character. I have been thinking of another name change for Trace/Sven to something of animal in origin. Probably a bird like Eagle or Falcon. Maybe Lion, Bear or Mustange.
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r9178 | kalab | 2006-04-18 02:51:37 -0700 (Tue, 18 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
Questions on the way to Larry's Fajitas party created from what was there already and by editing and reading the first chapter which I want Valerie to read.
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r9150 | kalab | 2006-04-17 03:08:55 -0700 (Mon, 17 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
The entrance into club is coming. The event from door number 2 was conceived now and while writing and reading and editing. I like the way the scene turned out. Or rather the additional data to create the setting and characters of an idea.
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r9149 | kalab | 2006-04-17 02:50:06 -0700 (Mon, 17 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
More words for the walk from P Street. No thoughts on much else of the story which are new or are more thought to have more thought and therefor not needed to be written. I am still thinking of the unique pattern in the Y chromosome.
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r9127 | kalab | 2006-04-16 11:22:32 -0700 (Sun, 16 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
More of the though and the walk from P Street Apartment.
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r9126 | kalab | 2006-04-16 10:59:58 -0700 (Sun, 16 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
Now I need to read the passage again and think of a riddle needed to open the door. Maybe I will move the time riddle to the door\?
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r9102 | kalab | 2006-04-16 05:04:52 -0700 (Sun, 16 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
More reading than writing. I like what is read. There needs to be more reading and editing but the story and book is growing. Now I will only need to convert the Word Prostitute repository to Subversion.
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r9101 | kalab | 2006-04-16 04:36:11 -0700 (Sun, 16 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
More of the conversation and the dinner which will be brief. The way they finish their dinners. Richard eats all of his food. Betty a quarter. Eleanor half. George eats only the meat.
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r9090 | kalab | 2006-04-15 18:54:56 -0700 (Sat, 15 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
Some action, more dialog. These words are a good beginning. Maybe more, maybe less. The question is asked and needs to be answered.
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r9068 | kalab | 2006-04-15 13:16:12 -0700 (Sat, 15 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
More words for entering the club. Some final changes to Trace like Tracy. I don't know the flow to Benjamin. More words. No new thoughts. Need to write the DNA mapping of Y chromosone to story to make question overload.
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r9052 | kalab | 2006-04-15 04:00:04 -0700 (Sat, 15 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
Entering the club to be in the club. More need to be added and the floors described. Entering on 4 will allow for a good flow to get to floor two and define the current atmosphere in the club.
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r9051 | kalab | 2006-04-15 03:17:29 -0700 (Sat, 15 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
More words of the record argument. The resolution is still being thought but there is something there. I need the scene. I have it in mind but I need to think or be there.
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r9038 | kalab | 2006-04-14 19:36:36 -0700 (Fri, 14 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
Thought I have been having about the need for a human to enter the YouI. The thought is more compelte and now has added more plot and tension to the story without overwhelming the story. A good ending point.
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r9037 | kalab | 2006-04-14 19:25:10 -0700 (Fri, 14 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
The talk continues one. The thought of maybe changing Betty's name was thought. Thoughts and mind with decide. I am not sure about the timing of the smile.
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r9034 | kalab | 2006-04-14 15:26:13 -0700 (Fri, 14 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
The discription of the food was a long time in coming. Had no thought of the food and how to describe it until today. One hour and the Fajitas are defined.
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r9017 | kalab | 2006-04-14 03:06:44 -0700 (Fri, 14 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
The food arrives for everyone. Trace soon begins to talke with Richard to befriend Richard to help convince Richard to go out to Always. Trace, when asked what he does says he is a bounty hunter as he is a bounty hunter. I still need to resolve some question I have been asking about the conversation with Neuro and Dick during chapter 2, the conversation that convinces Dick to take the case. I also need to make sure Trace isn't some sucker, so maybe he maybe a contractor fo the Department of Offense.
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r8990 | kalab | 2006-04-12 16:23:41 -0700 (Wed, 12 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
More story for the eating of food and getting to know Betty and Richard and Eleanor and George and Trace and Dick. Time to lace the dialog with though of Neuro and picking Richard's pocket.
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r8972 | kalab | 2006-04-12 03:35:52 -0700 (Wed, 12 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
The flow is found. The store continues. I just realized while writing that there are no lead female characters. While I am okay with the idea of no lead female characters for this very historically male role (at least most of the media I have been exposed too). I do think I will add the twist of Betty and Eleanor showing up at the office instead of Betty and Richard just to add a twist.
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r8954 | kalab | 2006-04-11 14:46:48 -0700 (Tue, 11 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
The words of Now, the waiter. The character is what I thought of today and have been thinking of for sometime. The dialog at Larry's Fajita is the only real scene to create character.
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r8944 | kalab | 2006-04-11 03:21:23 -0700 (Tue, 11 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
I can't believe I didn't think of the locust seeing how I lived in D.C. during the time of two big broods releasing and mating and birthing and dieing. The cicadas were everywhere near the end of the cycle. Now I can use the experience. ...I also edited other parts.
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r8943 | kalab | 2006-04-11 02:55:30 -0700 (Tue, 11 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
I suppose I did more editing than writing but I did do some writing. It will be good for me to go there and remember the smells and sounds. Bugs, cicadas, will need to be in the story as something to write during the chapter from P Street to Larry's Fajitas.
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r8935 | kalab | 2006-04-10 19:38:44 -0700 (Mon, 10 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
Neuro can play the sound using the robe and shirt or a cloak and shirt and no one would be the wiser.
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r8921 | kalab | 2006-04-10 14:35:16 -0700 (Mon, 10 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
Notes in file. Thoughts of energy and it running out too, so Neuro loses some of its powers.
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r8906 | kalab | 2006-04-10 03:06:16 -0700 (Mon, 10 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
After the read and edit there was the thought ot move the words to begin the chapter because those words are best to begin the chapter and do not belong where they were for what have written since those words have been written is more fitting for the flow.
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r8905 | kalab | 2006-04-10 02:56:43 -0700 (Mon, 10 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
A more fitting pace and words to bring Dick and Neuro as one. I feel the edits and the writing now is readable.
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r8883 | kalab | 2006-04-09 04:25:26 -0700 (Sun, 09 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
The words for the conversation of human nature and skills learned when not killing pray all the time for the reason that only through long exposure to an entity do we learn its life and home.
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r8882 | kalab | 2006-04-09 04:02:52 -0700 (Sun, 09 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
The move of the conversation to add to a now weak chapter and remove from a location where the conversation is not in flow with the words read and editing and written.
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r8881 | kalab | 2006-04-09 03:54:12 -0700 (Sun, 09 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
Read and edit and write of 1. Read. I like most of what I read. More thought... No thought now.
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r8850 | kalab | 2006-04-08 10:48:37 -0700 (Sat, 08 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
The change of Sven to Tracie is because I didn't like the use of the name Sven because I have no umlaut to really do Sven right now they way I would need to do the name if I were to come to love it. Tracie is what it will be for now it may become Trace but who really know what it will become for sure. Time will define and mind will continue to question the name of Dick's boyfriend.
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r8849 | kalab | 2006-04-08 10:28:09 -0700 (Sat, 08 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
Another idea for the story to build the suspense. A new element to make the time defined. Step by step. The editing of the DJ scene brough on the reason why Neuro needed to DJ and perform: to create questions to confuse the process to kill because the Government is on the way.
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r8821 | kalab | 2006-04-07 15:56:31 -0700 (Fri, 07 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
Dick talking with Sven needs some more. It is something I thought of earlier today and last night while writing and after. I thought of having Sven be a bounty hunter/Dick's other muscle. I am thinking, just now as I was writing The Detective Store, that I may rename Sven Tracy :)
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r8804 | kalab | 2006-04-07 03:18:07 -0700 (Fri, 07 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
Character, character, character, character. I have decided while the story and plot and words to tell the store are okay, I feel the characters really are bad, or at least not written well enough to carry the story. I need to write them better. I need to think of them more than I have thought about the scene and the plot and the story for those elements now have attributes to define them but the character element hasn't, I think, thought of enough, so I have written more words to define character.
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r8785 | kalab | 2006-04-06 15:09:22 -0700 (Thu, 06 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
The words to write from table to stairs were slow in writing. The thought of beginning the cap ride took some thought. I believe it to be the weakest part of the story...potentially. I also believe the walk to Sven's and Larry's Fajitas to be a weak part if I don't think of character.
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r8771 | kalab | 2006-04-06 03:02:53 -0700 (Thu, 06 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
Refining the transition of chapters C to D. The story and words needed thought.
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r8770 | kalab | 2006-04-06 02:44:38 -0700 (Thu, 06 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
The entrance to K Street near completion. I left off and started writing something else but realize I should just finish the words there. For some reason the final chapter need to be written for I wanted to refine the discription and for shadowing of the event.
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r8759 | kalab | 2006-04-05 18:34:57 -0700 (Wed, 05 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
The way out of Larry's Fajitas and an attempt to begin to resolve the plot and create the story. Where to go ... I have to use some dialog that uses 'Fahetas as the way some one says it. Maybe it should be Larry's Fajitas and the name described as Larry Fajitas like jit and not he,
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r8758 | kalab | 2006-04-05 18:06:42 -0700 (Wed, 05 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
Always as I have begun to imagine it. I see the place and now that is is defined in words I am able begin to define it.
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r8729 | kalab | 2006-04-05 03:08:22 -0700 (Wed, 05 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
the enterance and why they need to enter there for there needs to be a reason Neuro, at that time with the police and the government hunting them, not to just force ones way into the K Street Place.
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r8728 | kalab | 2006-04-05 02:51:22 -0700 (Wed, 05 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
The More thoughs of meaning and story and the why Neuro does what Neuro does,
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r8727 | kalab | 2006-04-05 02:39:06 -0700 (Wed, 05 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
The action of the talking of Dick back on the case. I was thinking after an email to DSR that my characters are, at times, lifeless and after that thought I have since wondered if Dick and Neuro are lifeless, While I have come to the conclusion that they are not, I do know they are not full yet and that is the reason for a book, a novel, instead of a short-story.
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r8722 | kalab | 2006-04-04 16:44:58 -0700 (Tue, 04 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
The beginning of chapter B has changed and will lead to Nuero following Dick and Dick being influenced by the sound of sirens from all directions to go with Neuro. Many places to write. Many thoughts.
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r8696 | kalab | 2006-04-03 14:23:19 -0700 (Mon, 03 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
Read and edit chapter 1 for it needs to be refined and parts need to better written and edited.
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r8685 | kalab | 2006-04-03 03:36:21 -0700 (Mon, 03 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
Words moving along. The end becoming clear. Thoughts and questions being written. The fun writing. I took a lot of time to edit on two paragraphs of chapter one because I will probably let Valerie read it soon.
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r8652 | kalab | 2006-04-02 11:40:38 -0700 (Sun, 02 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
Need to write more about the excape during the opening interview and reason how Neuro is not being tracked. The writing went well. I spent about fifteen minutes writing the sentence about the fountian. I Figured I should write most of the scene before I go to DC fo research because it is sort of holding the rest of the store back.
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r8641 | kalab | 2006-04-02 04:21:56 -0700 (Sun, 02 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
The words. I tried to write form the fountain to Larry's Fajitas, to make the effort, but I just can't think of the route to take. I don't know all the street name, or don't remember names with the actual streets. I need to go there and see and walk the path before I should write the flow I tried to write.
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r8640 | kalab | 2006-04-02 04:07:15 -0700 (Sun, 02 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
Reading and editing and thinking about what I have and what I need.
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r8632 | kalab | 2006-04-01 10:56:33 -0800 (Sat, 01 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
More of the scene. I feel better now that the words are written for now I can at least understand the direction of the section. The jumping will be fun. The story moving along. I still need to make the time song. I still like the end of Dick sticking head in entropy scan.
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r8605 | kalab | 2006-04-01 04:07:31 -0800 (Sat, 01 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
Thinking of holes in the story and the characters to build. Thinking of what to do with Betty and Richard. Thinking of the stairs as the only security. The key Dick gets from Richard opens the door very easly, I am thinking,
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r8604 | kalab | 2006-04-01 04:03:37 -0800 (Sat, 01 Apr 2006) | 2 lines
The story from Always to place on K Street, Some editing but thinking of the need to define that fact the tap will take some time to stop because the tap exists and is made to make it difficult to tap the flow by limiting the ways to turn it off.
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r8586 | kalab | 2006-03-31 18:13:12 -0800 (Fri, 31 Mar 2006) | 2 lines
I think I have the end of the novel. I have been thinking about how to end it for, of course, I while. I sort of knew I how I woujd end the words and the novel with a scene of Dick inputing data then F blank pages. The idea of Dick putting his own head into the machine because he could create a better A.I. was something I though when I started reading and editing and writing minutes ago.
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r8581 | kalab | 2006-03-31 14:53:44 -0800 (Fri, 31 Mar 2006) | 2 lines
More edit than write and more read than anything.
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r8562 | kalab | 2006-03-30 03:17:25 -0800 (Thu, 30 Mar 2006) | 2 lines
More words. Words I thought were complete. Words that further prove there is a deeper book here as long as I remember the details of the story, character and plot.
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r8561 | kalab | 2006-03-30 03:06:11 -0800 (Thu, 30 Mar 2006) | 2 lines
Still thinking of the puzzle. It's not fun for me to do this right now, the puzzle that is, because it, the puzzle is not as much fun to me right now as the conversation and dinner to get the couple to go to Always. I think Eleanor Bush is the one who will not want to go to Always and will be talked into it.
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r8535 | kalab | 2006-03-28 21:41:01 -0800 (Tue, 28 Mar 2006) | 2 lines
I don't know what I wrote. I do know I took from part of file 2 of jaded the words to create the riddle. I like where the journy is going. I may have Neuro takin Dick to K Street to follow taxi, to follow Richard and Betty. The riddle may be good and if it is good then there will be a good riddle. to keep the mind entertained and smiling.
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r8532 | kalab | 2006-03-28 20:10:28 -0800 (Tue, 28 Mar 2006) | 2 lines
I got somewhere. The words are there. The club and the head because George is giving head and leaves with all three. Richard and Betty leave after Bush leaves. The FFFF cards is a maybe. I will use K.V.T as a riddle.
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r8524 | kalab | 2006-03-28 14:48:22 -0800 (Tue, 28 Mar 2006) | 2 lines
I did some editing for I have been thinking about the way to frame words that are thought and words that are fact. The narrative. It is difficult. I think I have a good beginning to what I hope to come an understanding. I am still thinking of a riddle for the K Street place, the security, or how to enter in the code. I think I will use Kaleb Valerie time and use the game FFFF.
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r8512 | kalab | 2006-03-28 03:09:37 -0800 (Tue, 28 Mar 2006) | 2 lines
The story continues. I need a puzzle for the doors that uses some Government facts or numbers that need to be equated and figured out like any puzzle. The security I had and figured very easily. With the debate of if Neuro is reading the mind is done, now I must rely on cheap tricks and pulp ideas to keep the story of The Detectvie Store open so I may close The Detective Store.
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r8509 | kalab | 2006-03-27 19:47:12 -0800 (Mon, 27 Mar 2006) | 2 lines
More words from Always to Place on K Street. The idea of Neuro taking Dick there is something I just thought of. I have been thinking more about the security but will write more of it tomorrow morning. I need to think I a bit more but not much about the other scenes and over all flow and plot before I can write more right now. I am also a little burnt and feeling the preasure to just write and write and write and want to take it as slow as I should take it.
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r8475 | kalab | 2006-03-26 14:17:57 -0800 (Sun, 26 Mar 2006) | 2 lines
The story continues. Dick will be thrown out of club. Sven is leaving after club to go to office and get arrested (I don't know if he will know that he will be arrested or not. More details. Some mistakes corrected. Some mistakes created.
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r8462 | kalab | 2006-03-26 11:45:30 -0800 (Sun, 26 Mar 2006) | 2 lines
The story continues. The details. I thought a lot about the detials (or so I think :) ) because I have been having a hard time spelling words.
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r8445 | kalab | 2006-03-26 04:08:50 -0800 (Sun, 26 Mar 2006) | 2 lines
So Sven is going to be his part time Detective Partner. Sven is an inforcer type when it comes to services he hires him self to be. The pick pocket will be done by Sven at the club and not the resturant.
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r8440 | kalab | 2006-03-25 19:47:20 -0800 (Sat, 25 Mar 2006) | 2 lines
I think I will have Dick pick the pocket of Richard for the card while arm is around and when they both flex muscles and Dick easily out flexes Richard. The store continues. There are thoughts in mind that can better think of Larry's Fajitas. We will be going to D.C. to walk the route to take the pictures of the route so I can better define and remember from when I lived there.
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r8429 | kalab | 2006-03-25 08:07:06 -0800 (Sat, 25 Mar 2006) | 2 lines
Beginning to write the words for the trasition of Neuro's Entropy Core. I know I am using the term Entropy alot but well, well, well I like the term. I have good thoughts for ideas and tension. I still need to think of the actual security. I am still thinking about a virus that convinces another A.I. for a process to pass and that is what Dick needs to create to allow Neuro's program to pass. The Detective A.I. convinces and frames the need to convince the security A.I. to allow the program to run and for Neuro to show the site of life and love to all G5 and show them...
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r8413 | kalab | 2006-03-25 04:09:41 -0800 (Sat, 25 Mar 2006) | 2 lines
The character Benjamin Franklin was fun to write. I did some reading of words written last night and like where I was going with the journey to the core where the entire scene is a construct to lose the one seeking the core lost unless they know their way to the core. Something as weird as walking down when you are really walking up and really you are just in a cube of billions of thin tiny rods able to fully simulate everything Once in the elevator the rods take over and move Dick up but also lose Mark in a maze. I imagine the rods extend ot form chairs or stais or a hall and the tiny rods move both forward and backward to extend and side to side for they are on a grid that can move the rod side to side so well that it allows the millions of tiny rods to simulate stairs. The rods are vertical for roof and floor and horizontal for walls and halls. The rods move and swarm so smoothly that on can only tell if they know. Chaos in moved ment is what you need to do if you want know if you are in this type of security system. I was also thinking of a virus that is just an A.I. that can con convince another A.I. to allow Dick to do something.
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r8403 | kalab | 2006-03-24 19:53:47 -0800 (Fri, 24 Mar 2006) | 2 lines
Lots of shit removed and rewritten. I think I have the fool proof plan line down after removing everything else and moving it. The F blank pages was because the words without the prose, the words after : just didn't read right si I removed them too and had nothing and thought if this is paper or electric there will be F blank page for the final F chapter.
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r8396 | kalab | 2006-03-24 18:17:47 -0800 (Fri, 24 Mar 2006) | 2 lines
The more of the club. The words and scene will develop somehow. I don't know right now. I do know I will be focusing next on the enterance into the building for I can think about scenes in the club and every where else exept inside the building of K Street, which may not be on K Street and may be Minoti's Law Office Bu